Sample winning essay for Creatures of Light LeFrak Class of the Month Contest - Roberto

Roberto Image LeFrak

Roberto's work comes from Lissette Torres' winning sixth grade class at P.S. 20 P.O.George J. Werdan III.

 

This essay:

  • clearly introduces and defines the topic of bioluminescence
  • essay maintains focus
  • uses comparison to explain how the anglerfish uses bioluminescence in its environment
  • names 3 bioluminescent organisms
  • uses accurate and relevant facts from contest readings and the “Creatures of Light” exhibit to explain bioluminescence in 1 organism
  • demonstrates a developing sense of how to use different forms of the term bioluminescence in writing (i.e. bioluminescent, bioluminescence, bioluminescent organism)
  • includes a relevant conclusion that provides a sense of closure
 

Its illustration:

  •   depicts a bioluminescent organism and the bioluminescent feature, but does not accurately communicate how the bioluminescent features of the organism is used