Sample winning essay for Life at the Limits: Stories of Amazing Species Class of the Month Contest - Malyla

Malyla PS 31

Malyla's work comes from Janet Sanchez's kindergarten class at PS 121 Throop in the Bronx.

 


This essay’s strengths:

  • Accurately presents information relevant to all parts of the prompt with effective paraphrased details from the article
  • Accurately presents information relevant to all parts of the prompt with effective paraphrased details from the exhibition
  • Integrates relevant and accurate science content with thorough explanations that demonstrate in-depth understanding of animal body parts
  • Uses three labeled illustrations to accurately communicate relevant information about the spiny pufferfish and two other animals; each illustration has at least one labeled body part
  • Maintains a strongly developed focus on the writing prompt for the entire essay
  • The description of each animal includes its name and one body part along with