Sample winning essay for Life at the Limits: Stories of Amazing Species Class of the Month Contest - Olive

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Olive's work comes from Melissa Murphy's 5th grade class at PS 9 Sarah Anderson school.

The essay’s strengths:

  • Accurately presents information relevant to all parts of the prompt with effective paraphrased details from the article and exhibition
  • Integrates relevant and accurate science content with thorough explanations that demonstrate in-depth understanding of animal body parts and their function
  • Uses labeled illustrations of the spiny puffer fish and two other animals to accurately communicate relevant information
  • Provides a concluding paragraph
  • Consistent use of precise and domain-specific language where appropriate