Sample winning essay for Pterosaurs: Flight in the Age of Dinosaurs Class of the Month Contest - Nalani

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Nalani's work comes from Jennifer Kneeland's second grade class at P.S. 031 the William Lloyd Garrison in the Bronx.

 


This essay’s strengths:

  • Accurately presents information relevant to all parts of the prompt with effective paraphrased details from the Museum exhibit.
  • Integrates relevant and accurate science content with thorough explanations that demonstrate in-depth understanding of the topic.
  • Uses a labeled illustration of a pterosaur fossil to accurately communicate relevant information.
  • Maintains a strongly developed focus on the writing prompt for the entire essay.
  • The description of the pterosaur includes its scientific name and accurate details about three body parts.
  • Consistent use of precise and domain-specific language where appropriate
 

Needs additional support:

  • Does not explicitly introduce the topic of pterosaurs.