Sample winning essay for Whales: Giants of the Deep Class of the Month Contest - Jason

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Jason's work comes from Rachel Pudel's third grade class at P.S. 130 Hernando DeSoto.

 

This essay’s strengths:

  • Clearly introduces and defines the topic of whale adaptation
  • Maintains focus throughout
  • Names three whale adaptations and describes how they are used
  • Uses accurate and relevant facts from contest readings and the “Whales: Giants of the Deep” exhibit to explain whale adaptations
  • Illustration depicts and labels the adaptations discussed in the essay, along with helpful explanatory notes
 

Needs additional support:

  • Grammar and syntax
  • Scientifically accurate definition of “adaptation”