Sample winning essay for Whales: Giants of the Deep Class of the Month Contest - Rachel

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Rachel's work comes from Rachel Pudel's third grade class at P.S. 130 Hernando DeSoto.

 

This essay’s strengths:

  • Clearly defines adaptation and introduces the topic in the context of whales
  • Maintains focus throughout
  • Names three whale adaptations and describes how they are used
  • Uses accurate and relevant facts from contest readings and the “Whales: Giants of the Deep” exhibit to explain whale adaptations
  • Illustration depicts and labels the adaptations discussed in the essay, along with excellent, informative captions
 

Needs additional support:

  • Paraphrasing instead of copying content from the reading