Sample winning essay for Mummies LeFrak Class of the Month Contest - Amy

Amy's work comes from I-Ling Hsieh Perez winning fifth-grade class at PS 184 M Shuang Wen School.

The essay’s strenghts:

  • Presents paraphrased information from the exhibition relevant to the prompt with sufficient accuracy and detail
  • Integrates relevant and accurate social studies content with thorough explanations that demonstrate in-depth understanding of the Egyptian and Peruvian mummies
  • Uses labeled illustrations of Egyptian and Peruvian mummies to effectively communicate relevant information
  • Uses captions to effectively explain the illustrations
  • Includes an introductory paragraph that clearly introduces the topic of Egyptian and Peruvian mummies
  • Provides a relevant concluding paragraph
  • Demonstrates and maintains a command of standard English conventions and cohesion, with few errors response includes language and tone consistently appropriate to the purpose and specific requirements of the prompt