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Sample winning essay for Mummies LeFrak Class of the Month Contest - Oscar

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Oscar's work comes from I-Ling Hsieh Perez winning fifth-grade class at PS 184 M Shuang Wen School.

The essay’s strenghts:

 

  • Accurately presents information relevant to all parts of the prompt with paraphrased details from the exhibition
  • Presents social studies content relevant to the prompt with sufficient accuracy and explanations that demonstrate understanding of Egyptian and Peruvian mummies 
  • Uses labeled illustrations of Egyptian and Peruvian mummies to effectively communicate relevant information
  • Uses captions to effectively explain the illustrations
  • Includes an introductory paragraph that clearly introduces the topic of Egyptian and Peruvian mummies
  • Provides a relevant concluding paragraph
  • Demonstrates and maintains a well-developed command of standard English conventions and cohesion, with few errors response includes language and tone consistently appropriate to the purpose and specific requirements of the prompt