Sample winning essay for Pterosaurs: Flight in the Age of Dinosaurs Class of the Month Contest - Jessie

Jessie PS 009

Jessie's work comes from Melissa Murphy's fifth grade class at P.S. 009 Sarah Anderson School.


This essay’s strengths:

  • Presents information from the Museum exhibit relevant to the prompt with accuracy and sufficient detail.
  • Accurately presents science content relevant to the prompt with sufficient explanations that demonstrate understanding of the topic.
  • Describes what one fossil reveals about that pterosaur species.
  • Some use of precise and domain-specific language

Needs additional support:

  • Uses definition of “fossil” directly from the text without paraphrasing.
  • Maintains focus on the writing prompt for the majority of the essay but is off-topic some of the time.