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Sample winning essay for Creatures of Light LeFrak Class of the Month Contest - Shpat

Part of the Student Work from LeFrak Class of the Month Contest Winners Curriculum Collection.

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Shpat's work comes from Lissette Torres' winning sixth grade class at P.S. 20 P.O.George J. Werdan III.

 

This essay:

  • clearly introduces and defines the topic of bioluminescence
  • essay maintains focus
  • names 3 bioluminescent organisms
  • uses accurate and relevant facts from contest readings and the “Creatures of Light” exhibit to explain bioluminescence
  • develops facts about bioluminescence using information, examples and comparisons
  • demonstrates a developing sense of how to use different forms of the term bioluminescence in writing (i.e. bioluminescent, bioluminescence, bioluminescent organism)
  • Includes a relevant conclusion that provides a sense of closure
 

Its illustration:

  •  depicts a bioluminescent organism but does not clearly communicate the bioluminescent features of the organism