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Sample winning essay for Whales: Giants of the Deep Class of the Month Contest - Dina

Part of the Student Work from LeFrak Class of the Month Contest Winners Curriculum Collection.

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Dina's work comes from Rachel Pudel's third grade class at P.S. 130 Hernando DeSoto.

 

This essay’s strengths:

  • Names three whale adaptations and describes how they are used
  • Each section is well-structured and clearly written
  • Uses accurate and relevant facts from contest readings and the “Whales: Giants of the Deep” exhibit to explain whale adaptations
  • Illustration depicts and labels the adaptations discussed in the essay, along with helpful explanatory notes
 

Needs additional support:

  • The relevance of the introduction and conclusion to the writing prompt
  • Grammar and syntax